cuts from lafayandre fic

the introspection about andre ham has about why laf likes andre was different in v1, mostly because i really liked ham being reminded of this dinner. i actually want to put more stuff into why laf likes andre into the story but there just wasn't a bit. and i guess it's pretty obvious that laf cares about andre a lot even without all this other stuff.

( lafayandre cuts 1 )

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also there was a medium happy ending to this story before i decided to go with grief-rage drunk, but then i cut it, becuase i despise joy. also there i was a really sharp tone shift that didn't work. maybe there will be a happy ending at some point in the future. (just kidding, everyone has a bad ending.)

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ocular misc cuts 1

so originally there was going to be this scene where washington wants ham to transcribe his letters, but none of them want ham to leave the tent, so washington brings his desk and a bunch of his papers to ham's tent. and... i just cut it. becuase i wasn't really sure what to do here. this eventually turned into what is the talk with the apple, i think.

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ocular misc cuts 2

i went through a lot of versions of what The Look laf gives ham when he's Wise Lafayetting on him for a while. I wasn't sure what I wanted it to be, although I definitely wanted something in a relationship context, and I wanted it to be a wise thought.

originally it was jealousy because laurens is so close and adrienne is so far away, and it's a contradiction becuase of course ham can't love laurens openly but laf can pine for adrienne as much as he wants. but i cut this bit out becuase i felt they were straying from the topic of the chapter, and i didn't want laf to become the focus of it. it was only after i rewrote this bit a few times (this was the best version), that i realized i wanted laf's bit to be concern that ham would accidentally out himself, which is where the present version of this chapter comes from.

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ocular misc cuts 3 (apple bits)

takes place after ch14, after the bit with washingdad saying "i'm not saying you did this, but .... one of your crew did this."

( apple ocular discovery )

original pantheon beginning

this was the original start to pantheon, where instead of of starting in the solid and moving into this metaphysical shit, we start metaphysical. it did not at all mesh with the second half of the story and a real beginning bookended the real ending too well.

( pantheon )